Not bad. The beat needs some work, it doesn't feel like it's naturally in 4/4, so it's hard to groove to. Your lyrics are pretty good, though the beat also makes them seem a bit awkward rhythmically.Keep going with it, there's something pretty legit in there.
Needs a more steady beat in it. Otherwise, sounds pretty okay.
Oh haha, not even my beat. I'll use a different one. I'll re-record it sometime.